We have a good friend in our class named Neiko. She always deals with class affair with enthusiastic, she helps our class very much. Unfortunately, she transfers to another school in this semester. But we still keep in touch, and cherish the memory of freshman life. So, we decide to go to Taipei to give her a surprise when she’s birthday.
We went to Taipei when she’s birthday. When I got Taipei, I notice the public transit tools was very convenience and cheap, in particular MRT. I even did a stupid thing was that I bring the coin of MRT home. How did I go out the station? Nobody knows. Quickly we meet with Neiko’s Taipei friend and went Neiko’s home together.
When we got Neiko’s home, the friends call Neiko to open the door. The time Neiko open the door, we said happy birthday to she together. She felts very happy and surprise almost burst into crying. Then we were happily ate the cake and talk about what happened recently in each other. Finally Neiko said she will bring our to Tansui play. We felts very exciting.
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Hay, Q-MO. I thought your first sentence " We have a good friend in our class named Neiko" should be changed into (We have a good friend named Neiko in our class.
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"So, we (decide) to go to Taipei to give her a surprise when she’s birthday", the (decided)
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"We went to Taipei when she’s birthday. When I got Taipei, I (notice) the public transit tools was very convenience and cheap, in particular MRT" the notice should be corrected. (noticed)
"When I got Taipei, I notice the public transit tools was very convenience and cheap, in particular MRT." I thought "when I got Taipei" can correct like that( I arrived at Taipei) and the notice should modified to (noticed).
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and went(to) Neiko’s home together.
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Neiko said she will bring "our" (ous) to Tansui play
I bring(brought) the coin of MRT home.
Hay, Q-MO. I thought your first sentence " We have a good friend in our class named Neiko" should be changed into (We have a good friend named Neiko in our class.)
or (We have a good friend in our class who named Neiko) according to http://owl.english.purdue.edu/owl/resource/645/01/. Hope this could anwser your problem.
After I read your article, I found a wrong place in it. (We "felts" very exciting.)---(We "felt" very exciting.)
"almost burst into crying", the cring should change into tears.
http://tw.dictionary.yahoo.com/search?ei=UTF-8&p=burst+into+tears
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